Show the reader

As writers, we sometimes find that we must use our craft in a number of ways to earn money. For example, I do copy-writing and editing to earn money alongside other endeavors to make my living. In doing so, I find myself following the habits of an academic writer when I am working on a fiction or a poem. This can often flatten my work and quite frankly make the reader close the book or leave the webpage for something more entertaining.
In academic writing we must often times tell the reader things—it`s more of an educational venture. When we are writing a short story or some other form of creative writing we need to show the reader rather then tell them.
Example:
Telling the reader:Joe was angry with John and he suddenly grabbed a book from the table and threw the book across the room and said “I`m angry John.”
Showing the reader:Joe stood over the table, staring into oblivion, his eyes wide open, his brow furrowed. Suddenly, he grabbed a book from the table and threw it across the room—“Damn it John!”
In both cases the reader realizes that Joe is angry with John. In one case, it is very canned, emotionless, and boring. In the other case, the reader feels the emotion building and is just as surprised by Joe`s angry outburst as John probably was as he ducked the incoming book.
I write about this because I struggle with “showing” the reader all the time. As I write and re-write I am constantly looking for sentences that I can change to convey emotion rather than stating the emotion.
God bless, WP
Advertisements

S.W. Biddulph

Scott Biddulph is a published writer, author, and poet from North Georgia. He began writing as a youngster and followed his lifelong dream of reaching people through the written word when he returned to The University of North Georgia in 2013 to finish earning his BA/English with a concentration on publication and creative writing. His publications include the following: an eBook, Apples of Gold: A collection of inspirational short stories and poems (Smashwords, 2010) and a paperback, Voices from the Heart, (Createspace, 2012). His poetry is published in Papers and Publications Undergraduate Research Journal. Vol 3 (2014) and the award-winning Chestatee Review (Spring, 2015), among other places (Check his LinkedIn profile for a full list of his publications). He is currently working on publishing poetry, creative non-fiction, academic essays, and his memoir. Scott has also worked as an intern editor for the University of North Georgia Press. As a freelance editor, he has done the layout and design of several books and magazines. He is currently working with several authors on various publication projects in which he is either ghostwriting, editing manuscripts, or doing the layout and design. Scott continues working on his memoir Twisted Ride. He also maintains a Christian blog: A Disciple's Journey. Finally, and most importantly, he is a father, grandfather, husband, and dedicated Harley Davidson rider (with a huge beard). He and his family enjoy the beauty of the North Georgia Mountains where they live—especially their screened in back porch where they love to bird watch. - "I love realism. I love writing about the raw, down-to-Earth, heartfelt realities of life. I love to write in a way that reaches into the human soul. I love to take the greatest pains and struggles in life, and make them a blessing to others. Fantasy is a wonderful, interesting thing—but real life situations, feelings, fears, and dreams are an unexplored ocean of stories that need to be told." ~Scott Biddulph~

Join the conversation. We welcome your thoughts and ideas!

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s